My vision of school
Submitted by lgirmay on Tue, 10/13/2009 - 16:23.
Most schools miss the main purpose of schooling which is exiting kids to love Education and think for them self. Schooling is changed very little since it stated. Schooling were formed to revolving the farmers schedule. Still in America school uses the same schedule. Schools should change with technology.
The traditional way of learning requires memorizing and testing students on whatthey can memories on, which letter on could be forgotten by many. The traditional way schooling is basically brain washing students, which is a motivating for many. Motivating kids could be challenging because they are immature. As they say it takes a crook catch a crook. You got to think like kids to teach them. Kids have the lowest attention spam. Making things interesting to the kids by doing a lots of activities toengage the students and teach them to think for them selves would help much better then just telling them “stuff”. By making them reenact and engaging themin to the activity would serve them a lot. One they might grow an interest tothat filed two there is a much chance that they are going to remember it justbecause they engaged in it.
School should be a place where kids are free to express their ideas and opining and to experience things. School should be longer hours. From lots of research we know 75% of brain develops when they are below 5. Teach them things when they are blow that age such aslangheges instead of waiting until high school when you know they would not be interested on it hard for the students to understand or learn it. Scientist comes up with lots of study on what could be better for kids to learn but none of it is on practice at the moment that is just a waste. Some Canadian researcher(heard it on radio) he did a research on urban parents and middle in comefamilies on how they raise their kids. He actually find out that the urbanparent hit their kids and use inappropriate word around their child when the middle in come family try to reason with their 2 or 3 years old child. He foundout reasoning with the kinds and spending time with them even for half an hour will have a big different on the kids life. So kids should learn good ethic skill from home and school should be where they in enhance there knowledge and parntes should be as much involve in there child acandamic as much as theteachers.
You have done your job after you hook students to knowledge they would not going to let go. We would not going to have a problem who done there home work on not because students have a good working entice. School would be transform for the better.
Response
Hey,
I like you idea of letting the student "necessarily" roam on their own for the own need of learning, and I completely agree with you statement that kids have very small attention spans, but I think the only problem with a system like that would be trying to keep them on track. Yes, it would be better if schools allowed children to learn on their own, at their own pace, and without force feeding, but I think their still should be a tiny push in the correct direction. If yo let students roam on their own, you have no telling whether the information and the material the are learning on a topic is correct, or whether they are learning at all. I think it should be almost completely free, but with regulations, for example you have to remain in the building from blank until blank and you cannot do blank....but that would just be for topics that are unreasonable for example setting fire to cats, not a good idea.
~sps
Proofread, stick to the point
Before turning in an essay, you should proofread it to make sure that readers can understand what you're trying to say. For example, your first sentence talks about good schools "exiting" students. I'm fairly sure you meant "exciting." At some points, I couldn't guess what you meant.
To strengthen the essay, you should decide on your main point and support it with concrete examples and facts. Eliminate extraneous issues. If your main idea is that a good school motivates students to learn and think for themselves, then you need to explain how the school could do that. Don't call for a longer school day without explaining how that would motivate students or make them think.
As I recommended to Jerome, try rewriting the essay at half the length to see what's essential. Also, it helps to read your writing out loud to listen for clunky construction.
Perspective from a college freshman English essay grader
If this is your best work, your school has not taught you how to write properly. If this is not your best work, why is it published?
I grade college freshman English papers. This paper contains many basic mistakes, not only in mechanics, but also in structure and argument.
The paper lacks a clear focus. From the opening paragraph, I would have assumed that your thesis was that schools should use more technology. Yet this idea went undeveloped. The introduction should state your point. The body paragraphs should support your point.
To support your argument, you need specific evidence. "Some Canadian researcher (heard it on the radio)" does not convince your reader.
The paper contains elementary grammar mistakes. Words that should not be capitalized are. Spaces are not always placed between words. There are many spelling errors, and many sentences do not make sense. You may want to ask your school if they can teach you grammar before you graduate, so you don't need to take remedial English classes in college.
If you do not follow the conventions of written English, unfortunately your argument will be judged and mocked based on those mistakes.
Your Vision
Hi There,
I liked your essay, as a teacher I do know that there are certain foundation principals that need to be established in order to build more abstract lessons on. Yes, the brain develops a lot between 0-5 but are you aware that the brain goes a second growth spurt in your teenage years that is nearly just as dramatic?
Yes, it does. Your brain in the teen years goes through a spurt that makes connections and responses, while your brain may not grow as much in actual size it develops astronomically in complexity of thought.
Also during your teen years it has been scientifically proven that while you sleep your brain actually relearns what you learned, the proportion of your sleep is directly related to to your ability to retain knowledge.
Hey While looking over your
Hey
While looking over your essay I noticed that u touched on a great point. School is designed to feed us information that goes by the standard curriculum. Even though we are increasing our knowledge, it isn't satisfying our curiosity. Students want to learn information that will better themselves and teach them about areas that they are interested in. I have to disagree with you on one statement that you made about school being longer hours. I think that if we had longer hours, it wouldn't change the material that would be taught. Although i agree with schools being more well rounded with the curriculum,i think that there are more solutions than to increase school hours.
Tamara's response
Tamara I thought that was a thoughtful comment to a great essay, unfortunately your TXT typing takes away from your insight.
There are many theories of education that include increasing school hours and others that assert that efficient use of educational time and the quality of instruction is what really matters. I tend to agree with you and the latter.
Since you mentioned teach
Since you mentioned teach students things before they are 5, what do you suggest a kintergarten cirriculum should look like?
How do we know, or who gets to decide, when a student has learned enough?
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